The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The two pie charts illustrate the consumption of energy and the amount of the greenhouse gas emission in an average Australian households correspondingly.

Overall, it can be seen that heating remains the number one energy among the Australian households, whereas the greater proportion of emissions is caused by water heating. Another striking feature is that in both categories (energy and emission), cooling constitutes the least net.

In terms of energy use, heating stands at just over two-fifths (42%) of the total, compared to water heating at approximately one-third (30%). These two are followed by 'other appliances' at 15%, twice as many as refrigeration at 7%. Lighting and cooling are less used at 4% and 2% respectively.

In contrast, despite being the number two energy, it contributes most regarding the generation of the greenhouse gas at 32%, slightly higher than 'other appliances' at 28%. Next comes heating at 15%, which is almost close to refrigeration at 14%. Cooling is the lowest producer of the given noxious gas at 3%, nowhere near as close as lighting at 8%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'household'?
Suggestion: household
...e gas emission in an average Australian households correspondingly. Overall, it can be ...
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Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'categories'' or 'category's'?
Suggestion: categories'; category's
...nother striking feature is that in both categories energy and emission, cooling constitute...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, regarding, third, whereas, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 910.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17045454545 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00015065049 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613636363636 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 272.7 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0555160423 43.030603864 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.111111111 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.23603664747 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174848488502 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837455670586 0.103423049105 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0994131296366 0.0843802449381 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144351074095 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122453076339 0.0819641961636 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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the amount of the greenhouse gas emission in an average Australian households
the amount of the greenhouse gas emissions in an average Australian household

heating remains the number one energy among the Australian households
heating remains the number one energy used among the Australian households

despite being the number two energy, it contributes most regarding the generation of the greenhouse gas at 32%,
Description: 'it' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 176 200
No. of Characters: 866 1000
No. of Different Words: 108 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.642 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.92 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.033 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 66 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 52 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.54 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.222 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.4 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.661 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.032 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4