Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? (Study Sample)

Today, it is a trend that tourists of one country are willing to visit the cultural and historical attractions in another country to appreciate the culture and history of that country. People often argue that foreign tourists should be charged more than local ones when visiting the spots. Personally, I agree with this idea, whereas an appropriate way of charging is necessary as well.

First off, some places of interest provide language assistance, such as multilingual tour guides or translation devices for foreigners in order to help them overcome language barriers. It is not surprising when foreigners are entitled to the kind of convenience, they are supposed to be charged for extra money. In addition, the preservation and maintenance cost of the cultural and historical attractions shouldn't be ignored. It is pathetic to find that some tourism attractions have already been in a poor condition due to a lack of maintenance fund. Furthermore, tourism revenue makes up a great part of some countries' revenue, especially some poor countries, whose economy are experiencing the depression. For these countries, charging more money for foreign visitors can increase tourism revenue, thus boosting their economy.

However, that is not to say that tourist attractions can charge whatever price they want for foreigners, which is irresponsible and immoral, resulting in bad consequences. For example, a temple in my hometown once charged the foreign visitors three times as much the normal price, leading to a sharp decline of the number of foreign tourists. Everything is a matter of degree. Only by charging the foreign tourists a reasonable price, can tourist attractions remain its popularity and reputation among foreign tourists.

In conclusion, foreign tourists are supposed to be charged more than local ones when visiting tourists attractions of another country but only in a reasonable way. I believe that doing so can benefit the tourist attractions and the countries in terms of both tourism development and economic prosperity.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 407, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...the cultural and historical attractions shouldnt be ignored. It is pathetic to find that...
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Line 3, column 613, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...m revenue makes up a great part of some countries revenue, especially some poor countries...
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Line 7, column 144, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a reasonable way" with adverb for "reasonable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...attractions of another country but only in a reasonable way. I believe that doing so can benefit th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, so, thus, well, whereas, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.0 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.15609756098 380% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 20.0 5.60731707317 357% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 965.302439024 180% => OK
No of words: 321.0 196.424390244 163% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40498442368 4.92477711251 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 3.73543355544 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9839033359 2.65546596893 112% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 106.607317073 165% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548286604361 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 283.868780488 189% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5968334913 43.030603864 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.666666667 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 5.23603664747 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.13902439024 527% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188962853756 0.215688989381 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652994165558 0.103423049105 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513535062049 0.0843802449381 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117949706736 0.15604864568 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367702494074 0.0819641961636 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 61.2550243902 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.3012195122 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 11.4140731707 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 40.7170731707 204% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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