The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.Cambridge 6 test 1 task 1

The line graph illustrate water usage by 3 categories ( agriculture, indrustrial and domestic use), around the globe from 1900 to 2000, while the table compares the amount of water consumed by people in Brazil and Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000.

Overall, greater volume of water was used through agriculture. In terms of industrial and domestic use, they had used almost equal cubic measure of water and it remained constant for 2 decades. From 1950, there was an increase of amount of water used by both industry and domestic services. Congo had least number of people than Brazil. Large group of people in Congo occupied a small piece of land and consumed least amount of water, whilst, in Brazil the population was bigger, therefore vast land was used, as well as higher volume of water was used up.

It is of note, agriculture used up large amounts of water throughout the period. Looking at the graph; in 1900, it had about 500 cubic km, as it continue to increase to about 3000 cubic km. Similarly, water for industrial and domestic use was very insignificant, at approximately 0.1 cubic km from 1900 to about 1920s. Moving forward from 1920s, industries began to use more water than domestics, as it continue to rise steadily upto 1950, then from there a rapid increase was experienced until 2000 when it reached about 1000 cubic km. As for domestics, the volume of water used up remained constant from 1900 to 1950, it rose gradually to around 0.5 cubic km in 2000.

Furthermore, Brazil had the large number of people who occupied a vast space of 26,500 sq km, hence large volumes of water was consumed, at 359 cubic metres in 2000. However, DRC had a population of 5.2 million, living in a small piece of land at 100 sq km, only 8 cubic metres of water was used up by this group of people.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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... was an increase of amount of water used by both industry and domestic services. ...
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...ongo occupied a small piece of land and consumed least amount of water, whilst, in Brazil the ...
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...500 cubic km, as it continue to increase to about 3000 cubic km. Similarly, water...
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...to about 3000 cubic km. Similarly, water for industrial and domestic use was very...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, however, if, look, similarly, then, therefore, well, while, as for, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 33.7804878049 195% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 965.302439024 155% => OK
No of words: 319.0 196.424390244 162% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6802507837 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 3.73543355544 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50720603348 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 106.607317073 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467084639498 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 452.7 283.868780488 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9386273888 43.030603864 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.846153846 112.824112599 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5384615385 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 5.23603664747 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204096460663 0.215688989381 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100758533336 0.103423049105 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420627235038 0.0843802449381 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144421717117 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384094172193 0.0819641961636 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 40.7170731707 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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