The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

Essay topics:

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

The graph compares the amount of water used globally by sectors in km2 from 1900 to 2000 and the table illustrates the differences in water consumption between Brazil and Congo in 2000.

Overall, there is an obviously upward trend in the global use of water for agriculture, industry and domestic in the one-hundred-year period, starting from 1900. In addition, it can be clearly seen that in 2000, Brazilians consumed a huge more quantity of water compared to citizens of Congo.

In 1900, people worldwide barely used water for domestic and industrial purposes as the figure for them was about one-tenth compared with that for agriculture, which was 500km2 relatively. After 100 years, the proportion of water used for three categories all went up remarkably. The patterns for cultivating reached its highest peak, which was 3000km2 while that for domestic use increased much more slowly, which was five time as much as its figure in 1900. Meanwhile, the figure for industrial grew to about 1200km2.

In 2000, the number of people in Brazil was 176 million, which is nearly thirty-four times as many as the population of Congo, which was only 5.2 million. The amount of water consumed per person in Brazil was 359m2, which was much higher than that of Congo, which was at 8m2, and this might be because of the fact that Brazil had 265 times more irrigated land compared with that of Congo.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 295, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...go, which was at 8m2, and this might be because of the fact that Brazil had 265 times more irrigated lan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 3.15609756098 412% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1164.0 965.302439024 121% => OK
No of words: 236.0 196.424390244 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93220338983 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59291567946 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 106.607317073 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542372881356 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 339.3 283.868780488 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.247781107 43.030603864 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.333333333 112.824112599 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2222222222 22.9334400587 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181791651046 0.215688989381 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923640820013 0.103423049105 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849049266821 0.0843802449381 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141615503403 0.15604864568 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100356825752 0.0819641961636 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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