The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.Cambridge 6 test 1 task 1

The presented graph illustrates the global water use categorised in 3 different sectors (Agriculture, Industrial, and Domestic use) in the period between 1900 and 2000 (units are measured in KM3) while the table shows the consumption of water in Brazil and Congo in the year 2000.

Overall, the use of water increased gradually in all sectors during the given period. Meanwhile, agriculture was the sector where most of the water used. As is can be seen from the table, there is a massive difference in the consumption of water per person in Brazil which is about 36 times more than in Congo.

Speaking of water use worldwide, in 1900, agriculture was almost the only sector that consumes water, and it stayed as it is until 1930 where industry and domestic sectors begin to raise. In 1940, the use of water in agriculture was about 1000 Km3 while in industry and domestic were 100 and 200 respectively, the increase in water use stayed going up in all sectors until it reached 3000
km in agriculture and 1000 and 500 in industry and domestic sector.

Comparing the use of water per person in Brazil, which has a population of 179 million and an irrigated land of 26 Km with Congo which is home to 5.2 million inhabitants and has 100 km of irrigated land, shows an enormous difference while every Brazilian use 389 km each one in Congo uses only 8 m.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while, speaking of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1118.0 965.302439024 116% => OK
No of words: 240.0 196.424390244 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65833333333 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6217042803 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504166666667 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 343.8 283.868780488 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.4926829268 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.6939255928 43.030603864 201% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 159.714285714 112.824112599 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.2857142857 22.9334400587 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.23603664747 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259350218003 0.215688989381 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140225577762 0.103423049105 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047886254196 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147275871024 0.15604864568 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0881615455997 0.0819641961636 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.2329268293 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.89 61.2550243902 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.3012195122 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.9970731707 142% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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