The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USAbetween 1920 and 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.

Essay topics:

The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA

between 1920 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The graph demonstrated some striking similarities between the Chinese and the us birth rates from 1920 to 2000. Both countries experienced considerable fluctuations in the similar period with some lows during the 1940s and some highs during the 1930s.

The birth rates in china rose from 10% in 1920 to 15% in 1935. later, the figure plunged to a low of 5% in the 1940s and was followed by an exponential growth to the peak of 20% in 1950. Next, the fertility rate dropped sharply to 8% in the following five years. finally, the figure declined gradually to 3% during the latter half of the century.

Meanwhile, the us had similar birth rate of 12% to that of china in 1920. The figure fluctuated in between 12% and 14% during 1920s and 1930s until it hit a low of 4% in 1945. five years later, the birth rate reached a peak at 15% in 1950 but it made a steady fall to the final figure of around 7% in 2000.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Later
...a rose from 10% in 1920 to 15% in 1935. later, the figure plunged to a low of 5% in t...
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Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Finally
...rply to 8% in the following five years. finally, the figure declined gradually to 3% du...
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Line 5, column 120, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'during the 1920s'.
Suggestion: during the 1920s
...igure fluctuated in between 12% and 14% during 1920s and 1930s until it hit a low of 4% in 1...
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Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Five
...1930s until it hit a low of 4% in 1945. five years later, the birth rate reached a p...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he final figure of around 7% in 2000.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 748.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 170.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41265406844 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541176470588 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 207.0 283.868780488 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.1576417558 43.030603864 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1111111111 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8888888889 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.55555555556 5.23603664747 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144193932195 0.215688989381 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698844750093 0.103423049105 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722616513975 0.0843802449381 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102451131472 0.15604864568 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240214545986 0.0819641961636 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.2329268293 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 87.05 61.2550243902 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 11.4140731707 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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