The graph below shows the average monthly use of health club in Miami and Florida by all full time members over last year The pie charts show the age profile of male and female members

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the average monthly use of health club in Miami and Florida by all full-time members over last year. The pie charts show the age profile of male and female members.

The bar chart depicts the numbers of people in male and females used a health club as a full-time member per month in Miami, Florida while the pie charts describe the age profile in two sexes. In general, although the numbers of users varied according to the time in the year, more males than females went to a health club.

To specify, after a slight decrease from around 560 to the lowest point of about 520 for the first two months of the year, the number of users who were males rose rapidly to a pick of around 850 in June. After that, this number stayed unchanged in the next three months, and finally, fell continuously to approximately 610 by the end of the year. By comparison, the trend for the females was similar to that of the males, except that the increase in the number of users was not so marked as in the males group. For example, this number was stable at 500 in the first two months and went up gradually to around 700 in three months of the summer, before downward fluctuations between 730 and 520 during the final months.

Regarding the pie charts, in both sexes, half of the members were in aged between 21 and 45. Strikingly, only at age 65 and over does the number of members who were women was higher than that of men with 32 percent and 25 percent respectively.

To sum up, the number of people who went to a health club depended on the seasons of the year with almost users were at aged between 21 and 45.

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Average: 8.7 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, regarding, so, while, for example, in general, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 33.7804878049 186% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1177.0 965.302439024 122% => OK
No of words: 270.0 196.424390244 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.35925925926 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2366476237 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 106.607317073 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507407407407 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 344.7 283.868780488 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 3.36585365854 297% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.4212742101 43.030603864 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.777777778 112.824112599 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 22.9334400587 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 5.23603664747 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246488023966 0.215688989381 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114165529579 0.103423049105 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119608011385 0.0843802449381 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174704454316 0.15604864568 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132720551769 0.0819641961636 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.41 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.6 11.4140731707 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.4329268293 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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