The graph below shows cinema attendance by age group in Great Britain.

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The graph below shows cinema attendance by age group in Great Britain.

The graph compared the statics of cinema audiences by age in Greater Britain during the period of 1984 to 2000.
Overall, The adolescence was by far the most viewers of cinema while people aged 35 and over was by far the least in this country. furthermore, the age group 7-35 took the middle position of the total.
Starting from 18% in the beginning year, the 15-24 years old audiences had a significant rise to 30% in 1990 before experienced a fluctuation change to 38% in 1995. Subsequently, there was a sharp increase to 58% in 1999 then dropped slightly to 54% in the last year.
the aged 7-14 and 25-35 groups had a resemblance in fluctuation's growth which accounted for 5% and 10% in 1984 respectively to 32% in 2000.
In comparison, the figure of the oldest viewers gradually grew from 1% to 14% in 2000 as nearly half of 7-35 age attendance's percentage.

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...alf of 7-35 age attendances percentage.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 715.0 965.302439024 74% => OK
No of words: 154.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64285714286 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76523517126 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62987012987 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 196.2 283.868780488 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.2004486865 43.030603864 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.142857143 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 22.9334400587 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199084181949 0.215688989381 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916101257091 0.103423049105 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767528374714 0.0843802449381 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112197313862 0.15604864568 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0781808825083 0.0819641961636 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 61.2550243902 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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