The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.

The graph gives information about the typical demand for electricity in the UK during winter and summer. What is more, the pie chart shows what the electricity is used for.

It is obvious that electricity is demanded way more in winter than summer. The lowest electricity usage in the winter is 30,000 at 5-9 hours, however, the highest electricity usage in summer is even lower than the lowest number in the winter. Which makes it clear that people have a tendency to use more electricity in winter. At 0 to 3 hours there is a sharp increase in the numbers of electricity's units in winter. From 12 to 18 the number levelled off and after that started to increase slowly. At 21 hours units of electricity rose to nearly 45.000, but decreased substantially right after. In summer the number of electricity usage went steadily and the trend was downwards till at 9 hours, when it suddenly started to rise and reached the highest number; 20,000. Later, the number decreased, yet it followed by an increase afterwards.

Electricity is mostly used for heating rooms, heating water by 52.5% people. The other category that people mostly used electricity is for ovens, kettles, and washing machines by 17.5%. And 15% of people used it for lightening, radio and Tv while the rest 15% of people’s usage is for vacuum cleaners, food mixers, and electric tools.

The overall picture is that people were most likely to use electricity in winter in order to use heaters for both rooms and water even though the number of usage fluctuated a bit. Which shows the reason why people did not use electricity as much as in winter and there were no such big differences at the usage number during the day.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 244, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, while, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1405.0 965.302439024 146% => OK
No of words: 294.0 196.424390244 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77891156463 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 3.73543355544 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56995467604 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 106.607317073 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503401360544 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 436.5 283.868780488 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.482926829268 1035% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6058357092 43.030603864 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6666666667 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.73333333333 5.23603664747 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372944995057 0.215688989381 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146846821516 0.103423049105 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0942769767022 0.0843802449381 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271345827413 0.15604864568 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126899454043 0.0819641961636 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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