The graph below shows in percentage term the charging patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The graph below shows in percentage term the charging patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph illustrates the effect of modern technology appearing in families in the UK every couple of year from 1996/97 to 2002/03.
In general, those equipment show a trend of increase, however, it can be separated by two stages, before 1998/99 and after this time. In the first stage, while the internet was not provided, computer, mobile phone or CD player have a slight increase from 1996 to 1999. Especially, CD player accounts almost families in this country by around 60%. Once the internet appears in 1998/99, it made everything change. The percentage of families can use internet increase sharply from almost 10% to around 40% during 4 years. By using the internet, the used mobile phone fluctuated wildly, but the trend was upward. Consequently, the mobile phone takes account of modern equipment as an important part with almost 65% and nearly reach to the CD player. While internet sharply climb and the home computer still remains the rate of development, the CD player began less and less us.
It is noticeable that internet access strongly affected on the habit of electronic using from the past to the future.

Votes
Average: 10 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 13, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this equipment' or 'those equipments'?
Suggestion: this equipment; those equipments
...r from 1996/97 to 2002/03. In general, those equipment show a trend of increase, however, it c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, still, while, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 943.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 190.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96315789474 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55503955876 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 106.607317073 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621052631579 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 277.2 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.3394948647 43.030603864 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.3 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.23603664747 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0639367959701 0.215688989381 30% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0253163860932 0.103423049105 24% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323867770007 0.0843802449381 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0592070805028 0.15604864568 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387062607988 0.0819641961636 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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