Please briefly state your family, experience, study plan and motivation (at least 400 words)

Essay topics:

Please briefly state your family, experience, study plan and motivation (at least 400 words)

I was born in a city, near the North of Vietnam. Growing up in a family who farmed for many generations, my parents taught me the meaning of working hard as a farmer to survive and change my life. However, nothing is going in a right way when my mother diagnosed cancer. Fortunately, she could recover but it took several years to work better because she had heart disease from many years ago. After all, I am grateful to my family to help me understand that "if we can pass through the poor and low-occupation, has no difficulty bigger than that".
I became a student in a class that was chosen from the top of our technology university supported by the French government. From this program, a good background in mathematics, Fluid Mechanics and French that I am able of pursuing further education. Then, I got a fellowship for a Master degree.

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Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
I was born in a city, near the North of ...
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Line 1, column 228, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a right way" with adverb for "right"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ange my life. However, nothing is going in a right way when my mother diagnosed cancer. Fortun...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...no difficulty bigger than that'. I became a student in a class that was c...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... got a fellowship for a Master degree.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, then, after all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 707.0 1615.20841683 44% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 152.0 315.596192385 48% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65131578947 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 4.20363070211 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85577093472 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 176.041082164 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.710526315789 0.561755894193 126% => OK
syllable_count: 218.7 506.74238477 43% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0191548582 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.375 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.38176352705 46% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.244688304435 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.084324248473 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.151304729494 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 78.4519038076 42% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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