Nowadays, women play an important role in all field: economic, education, politic, culture...etc. Once the influence soar, the equality point is more and more mentioned. People highly suggest that women could be considered to occupy the place in the military. Personally, I highly agree with this opinion and show how good it is.
First and foremost, many military missions require some characteristics that women will be better than men, For example, teaching or training. In such jobs, the teachers can provide more fluently lectures. In Korea, they normally use women to instruct their juniors technique or law. As far as we know, the military mission is affordable in Korea that the women can totally compete with the men.
Secondary, history obviously prove that women could assist other groups as well. In the Vietnam war, women took part in whole certain fields from delivery foods, weapons to become a pilot. In addition, they could do some mission that was extremely dangerous such as find information from the enemy. the women contributions were recognized as the heroes in our country.
Last but not least, the idea that women should stay at home and just take care of their children, do only housework has become obsolete. As can be seen, women can hold various activities at the same time and do them very perfectly. My mother is a good case in point. Although she is a teacher, she always does her housework, takes care of her children and is engaged in various activities simultaneously.
To sum up, I take the view that by permitting women to join even the “hardest activities” we can keep balance between males and females and get benefit from their abilities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, second, so, well, for example, in addition, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00709219858 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75202894182 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648936170213 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2828413359 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0588235294 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5882352941 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35294117647 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166572120569 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473396593742 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384146466846 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0815458585015 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0204830798945 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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