The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The line graph compares and predicts the percentage of elderly people aged 65 and over in Japan, Sweden, and the USA countries from three different continents from 1940 to 2040.

Overall, it can be seen that, despite some fluctuations, over the period as a whole the rate of aged people has been rising in all three countries. While the number of the elderly in Japan was initially at the lowest level in 1940 compared to the two other countries, it is predicted that this figure will surpass them by 2040.

In 1940, while the highest rate of the aged population belonged to the USA at 9%, followed by Sweden at 7%, Japan enjoyed the lowest percentage of the elderly at 5%.

The USA and Sweden experienced the same pattern of the growth of aged people between the 1940s and the 1990s, ending up with the reversed pattern in the year 2000 when the number of the Sweden elderly increased significantly, reaching 20% in 2018 while this remained constant at 14% for the USA. By contrast, in Japan, after falling slightly to 3% in 1960, the percentage of the aged people leveled off at the same rate until 1988, and then it saw a gradual increase, reaching 8% in 2019.

Moving to the predicted figure, we can see that the number of people aged 65 and over in Japan is estimated to rise sharply in 2030, reaching 25% before a peak of 27% by 2040, which will be the highest level. However, after experiencing a slight decrease in 2025, it is predicted that the percentage of the elderly in Sweden will reach a peak of over 25% by 2040. In addition, it is estimated that the rate of old people in the USA will reach 23% by the year 2040, which will be the lowest level.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r 2040, which will be the lowest level.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 14.0 5.60731707317 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 33.7804878049 186% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 965.302439024 143% => OK
No of words: 305.0 196.424390244 155% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51475409836 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4042334784 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 106.607317073 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455737704918 0.547539520022 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 401.4 283.868780488 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 22.4926829268 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.1707323577 43.030603864 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.0 112.824112599 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.8888888889 22.9334400587 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215990008673 0.215688989381 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102000835397 0.103423049105 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763727736604 0.0843802449381 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142593830958 0.15604864568 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0850355905105 0.0819641961636 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.2329268293 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.36 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.47 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 40.7170731707 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.9970731707 138% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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