The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features

Essay topics:

 The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features.

The Table depicts the proportion of using features of mobile phones by its users from 2006 to 2010

Overall, it can be clearly seen that majority of people used mobile phones for call purpose. While, they showed less interest in using it for record video and play music.
It is vivid from the table that significant proportion of people preferred to use mobile phone for call in 5 years. The others usable features were send and receive text messages and take photos with 73% and 66% then, the popularity of these inclined to 79% and 76% respectively. The most striking feature is that playing games feature inclined the most as compare to other features as it was small number of 17% then climbed to 42% in just 2 years and remained almost same till 2010.

Moreover moving towards play music feature, one-tenth of people were interested in this and it rose to just above quarter in the next four years. Furthermore, no one was using phone for searching the internet and record video in 2006 then after two years, these features became popular with 41% and 9%, it surged by 32% and 24%.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...for call in 5 years. The others usable features were send and receive text mes...
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...n 5 years. The others usable features were send and receive text messages and ...
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...s and take photos with 73% and 66% then, the popularity of these inclined to 79% ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, moreover, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 5.60731707317 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 903.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 193.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67875647668 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27810818592 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 106.607317073 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611398963731 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 272.7 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.3907960746 43.030603864 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0 112.824112599 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5714285714 22.9334400587 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.23603664747 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275212967063 0.215688989381 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127738663529 0.103423049105 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114709833013 0.0843802449381 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196721317849 0.15604864568 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0788975730695 0.0819641961636 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.2329268293 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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