More children in developed countries are becoming overweight This is a serious problem for wealthy countries Discuss some causes and effects of this problem

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More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.
Discuss some causes and effects of this problem

Nowadays children get opportunity to have different types of food and entertainment whenever they want. Due to which they have become obsessed towards it hence they have become unfit and overweight. It has become a major issue for many countries. This essay will discuss reasons of becoming overweight and its impact on their health and growth.

There is plethora of reasons behind such issue but the chief among of them is availability of different types of fast food at their nearest store. Now fast food have become cheaper and popular among youngsters thus children prefer of eat fast food to satisfy their tongue instead of healthy food which has adverse impact on their health and give birth to many diseases like cholesterol, blood pressures, allergic, food poisoning, immunity and gastric problems for instance It is surveyed by the food and health organization the proportion of consumption of fast food has been increased to its fourfold and rate of diseases in this age group is also raised at the same rate.
Moreover, children are very fascinated towards electronic equipments such as computers, tablets, laptops, Smartphone etcetera. In today’s world juveniles prefer to spend longer hours on these gadgets in terms of playing games and chatting with friends on social sites rather than any physical activity. This type of sedentary lifestyle has effect on the holistic development of the child as this age is essential for the growth and development of their child. Moreover other factors responsible is lack of parks and playgrounds for the children as now cities have become a crowded place therefore ,parents prefer their children to stay at home.

In conclusion, it can conclude that children must know the importance of health on their development. I also feel this problem can be eradicated if government, children and parents come forwards to control it.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1581.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18360655738 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70946265018 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580327868852 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 118.096358962 49.4020404114 239% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 131.75 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4166666667 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41666666667 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211903471867 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826446110604 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675152320712 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134259889739 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403200104525 0.056905535591 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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