he charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50 year period Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words Writing task 1

Essay topics:

he charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Writing task 1

This pie chart illustrates how tourism in Australia and Germany have changed between 1960 and 2010.

It clearly shows how majority of the tourists in Australia changed from european to asian while in germany, europe remained as the main source of tourists througout the period.

in 1960, more than half of the tourists visited Australia were from europe which change drastically in 2010.Asian tourists increased by 53% while european tourists were reduced to mere 10% from 53%.

Less people visited Australia from USA and Britain in 2010 as compared to 1960.Visitors from USA dropped to 7% from 12% and for the british,it was a 5% decrement from 25% in 1960.

In contrast, in germany,europeans took the larger share of the chart though there was a slight decrease of 5%, from 45% to 40% during the time period.Asian tourists increased but not as sharply as they did in the previous chart.They went from 10% to 25%.Travellers from USA increased by 4% while the number of british visitors fell drastically.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...ce of tourists througout the period. in 1960, more than half of the tourists vi...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Asian
...europe which change drastically in 2010.Asian tourists increased by 53% while europea...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: Fewer
...s were reduced to mere 10% from 53%. Less people visited Australia from USA and B...
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Suggestion: Visitors
...and Britain in 2010 as compared to 1960.Visitors from USA dropped to 7% from 12% and for...
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...opped to 7% from 12% and for the british,it was a 5% decrement from 25% in 1960. ...
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Suggestion: , europeans
... 25% in 1960. In contrast, in germany,europeans took the larger share of the chart thou...
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Suggestion: Asian
... from 45% to 40% during the time period.Asian tourists increased but not as sharply a...
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Suggestion: They
...arply as they did in the previous chart.They went from 10% to 25%.Travellers from US...
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Suggestion: Travellers
...revious chart.They went from 10% to 25%.Travellers from USA increased by 4% while the numb...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 849.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05357142857 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86471590602 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595238095238 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 234.0 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.4926829268 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.9434800343 43.030603864 186% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.8 112.824112599 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6 22.9334400587 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.23603664747 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 1.69756097561 530% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0669898072102 0.215688989381 31% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536710183757 0.103423049105 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04597594559 0.0843802449381 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0536710183757 0.15604864568 34% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04597594559 0.0819641961636 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.2329268293 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 61.2550243902 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.9970731707 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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