"Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness. since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related product and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the
In the argument, the author suggests that a decline in the economy is the main cause for diminishing fitness of the Corpora's citizen. So, he assumes that the fitness of the citizens is directly related to the cities economy and will improve along with the economy. However, his assumptions are based on some unwarranted reasoning. To make his argument more persuasive following evidence are required.
First of all, the author rejects the experts claim about the computer being the main culprit for loss in the fitness of citizens. To support his contention he represents the fitness level of the regions where computer ownership is high. But in reality, it may happen that most of the computers are not actually personal computers on which people spend most of the days rather the commercial computer used for some specific purposes. Maybe that region is actually a commercial area filled with offices who use a large number of computers which increases per head computer ownership whereas, rest of the people doesn't have a single computer. Maybe that region is a rich neighborhood where most of the citizens own several computers while they use none or one or two of them. In other regions, it may be the case that most of the people living there are teenagers who spend a lot of time sitting in front of their computers all day and in those regions, computers are actually playing an important role in declining people's fitness. If this is the case in reality, then economic growth might actually contribute to declining people's health, as people will be more affluent to buy more computers.
Secondly, he compares present-day fitness standard with that of 20 years earlier. while, in reality, these two standards may not be comparable at all. Maybe the earlier standard was based on food habit, people's lifestyle, the economic condition and other criteria of the time when these aspects were much more different than what it is today. Maybe the previous standard was too easy to follow that's why the percentage of people who met the standard was high. If this standard is followed today, then today's percentage might be even higher then what it was 20 years ago. When it comes to the standard, there is a potential that the standard is impractical and giving a false image of the people's fitness whereas the condition is much better in reality.
Finally, the author directly relates the unwillingness of people to buy fitness product directly to economic condition. In reality, maybe the people are not that poor but are not willing to buy fitness products. Perhaps, they are not that concerned about their health and fitness and often indulge in activities which are detrimental to health. What is it is the case that they drink to much alcohol or eat too much fast food that the health condition of the citizens is declining. Maybe their economic condition is not related to their health at all. Maybe the environment in which they are living is not healthy, most of the foods they are eating are not nutritious enough. If this is the case then improving the economic condition of the city will do no good in improving people's health and the author's prediction about improved health condition will not come true.
The author's argument is based on some superfluous assumptions which are rife with holes and lacks enough evidence. He needs to look deep into what is actually causing the deterioration in people's health rather coming into conclusion early and in doing so scientific surveys, expert's opinion (which he declines )might come in handy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cities'' or 'city's'?
Suggestion: cities'; city's
...the citizens is directly related to the cities economy and will improve along with the...
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Line 5, column 510, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ercial area filled with offices who use a large number of computers which increases per head comp...
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Line 5, column 610, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...r ownership whereas, rest of the people doesnt have a single computer. Maybe that regi...
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Line 13, column 83, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...standard with that of 20 years earlier. while, in reality, these two standards may no...
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Line 13, column 321, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
... these aspects were much more different than what it is today. Maybe the previous st...
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Line 13, column 395, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...revious standard was too easy to follow thats why the percentage of people who met th...
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Line 13, column 502, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
...f this standard is followed today, then todays percentage might be even higher then wh...
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Line 13, column 534, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'higher than'?
Suggestion: higher than
...y, then todays percentage might be even higher then what it was 20 years ago. When it comes...
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Line 13, column 689, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...actical and giving a false image of the peoples fitness whereas the condition is much b...
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Line 19, column 385, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
... What is it is the case that they drink to much alcohol or eat too much fast food ...
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Line 19, column 800, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ood in improving peoples health and the authors prediction about improved health condit...
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Line 23, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... condition will not come true. The authors argument is based on some superfluous a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, while, as to, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 42.0 19.5258426966 215% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2990.0 2235.4752809 134% => OK
No of words: 601.0 442.535393258 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97504159734 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95129289623 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55456590455 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432612312812 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 918.0 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7896165597 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1153846154 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53846153846 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119344288903 0.243740707755 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0382306674778 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421089518653 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0657045936435 0.150359130593 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549603706892 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.