IELTS 10 Test 1 Writing Task 1 - Academic

The first pie chart presents how average australian families used energy, while the second pie chart provides the corresponding information of the emitted greenhouse gas resulting from their energy used. Overall the majority of energy consumption of australian household was for heating; however, this was in contrast to the green house gas emission which mostly came from water heating.
Looking first at the proportion of Australian household energy consumption. Most of it went to heating; 42% followed by water heating; 30%. The energy consumed by other appliances halved of that by water heating, accounted for 15%. The percentage of energy used for refrigeration, lighting and cooling were trivial, total of those percentages accounted for less than 15%.
Now turning to Australian household greenhouse gas emissions. The majority of it (32%) caused by water heating. Surprisingly, this did not go in the same way as energy consumption. The activity that caused the second highest greenhouse emission was the use of other appliances, 20%. Whereas heating that most of the energy was used for, did not release that much greenhouse gas, accounted for 15%. And about the same percentage was found for refrigeration, 14%. The proportion of cooling and lighting was very small, together was only about 10%.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, look, second, whereas, while, as for, in contrast, in contrast to, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1102.0 965.302439024 114% => OK
No of words: 206.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34951456311 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86386374057 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519417475728 0.547539520022 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 329.4 283.868780488 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.6548449383 43.030603864 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.7692307692 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8461538462 22.9334400587 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 5.23603664747 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0103143059707 0.215688989381 5% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00469272751686 0.103423049105 5% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0162560849706 0.0843802449381 19% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00684096667203 0.15604864568 4% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00967458784733 0.0819641961636 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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