IELTS WRITING TASK 1. Describe the diagram
The changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School is explained by the diagrams since its construction in 1950. It differents gradually from 1950 to 2010.
Overall, there are three changes in the diagram, which begins with the crudeness, finishes with some developed construction. The changes have taken place at this school are extreme expanded. They have a little bit innovation over 60 years.
Initially, this school was normal and has very detrimental things.In 1950, it just had school, farmland, pkayground and houses. But the scale of this school changed enormously over 30 years. It had more works and abolished farmland and houses in 1980.The area of houses was used for buliding car park and science block.In 2010, it wasn’t edited considerably .The car park is just more gigantic than it in 1980. In addition, the sports field is became shorter and narrowed. At the end, the West Park Secondary School has moderate changes from 1950 to 2010 and will be look up in the future.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 57, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... have taken place at West Park Secondary School is explained by the diagrams sinc...
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Line 3, column 204, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...chool are extreme expanded. They have a little bit innovation over 60 years. Initially,...
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Line 5, column 67, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
... normal and has very detrimental things.In 1950, it just had school, farmland, pka...
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Line 5, column 252, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...d abolished farmland and houses in 1980.The area of houses was used for buliding ca...
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Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...for buliding car park and science block.In 2010, it wasn’t edited considerably .Th...
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Line 5, column 358, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...k.In 2010, it wasn’t edited considerably .The car park is just more gigantic than ...
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Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...In 2010, it wasn’t edited considerably .The car park is just more gigantic than it ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, second, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 840.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54906501022 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636904761905 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 235.8 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.0354686728 43.030603864 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 22.9334400587 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.23603664747 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0295217077328 0.215688989381 14% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0125229030938 0.103423049105 12% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0250458061877 0.0843802449381 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0304822143668 0.15604864568 20% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220511176457 0.0819641961636 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.4329268293 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 57, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... have taken place at West Park Secondary School is explained by the diagrams sinc...
^^
Line 3, column 204, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...chool are extreme expanded. They have a little bit innovation over 60 years. Initially,...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 67, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
... normal and has very detrimental things.In 1950, it just had school, farmland, pka...
^^
Line 5, column 252, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...d abolished farmland and houses in 1980.The area of houses was used for buliding ca...
^^^
Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...for buliding car park and science block.In 2010, it wasn’t edited considerably .Th...
^^
Line 5, column 358, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...k.In 2010, it wasn’t edited considerably .The car park is just more gigantic than ...
^^
Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...In 2010, it wasn’t edited considerably .The car park is just more gigantic than it ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, second, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 840.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54906501022 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636904761905 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 235.8 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.0354686728 43.030603864 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 22.9334400587 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.23603664747 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0295217077328 0.215688989381 14% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0125229030938 0.103423049105 12% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0250458061877 0.0843802449381 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0304822143668 0.15604864568 20% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220511176457 0.0819641961636 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.4329268293 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.