It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

one of the controversial issues today relates to whether some people are genetically equipped with certain talents,such as athlete or musicians or it is possible to acquire such gifts through hard work and many practices.I tend to believe that regular determination on a particular field can leads to a successful career.Here,I am going to shed some lights on this questions from both points of view.

To begin with, there are people who argue that if someone is born with inherent talents than they don't have to work hard and could easily get success. It is because they already acquire certain talents from their ancestors like father, grandfather,etc. For instance, five years old child can play a multiple drums without any difficulties like a professional musicians. I am sure that it is not possible to gain such skills by learning at an early age.Moreover,many people achieve name and fame during their young period because they are born with inherent skills.Similarly,our nepalese cricketer sandeep lamichhane, who was very young gain more popularity at the age of 17 due to his best performance in cricket career. And not only he is good cricketer but he is a good singer too. Therefore,people who are capable to express their particular talents at young age have very beautiful career in the future.

on the other hand,there is possible to make an opposing idea,sometimes we need to believe in determination and labour.
I think everything is possible if we are really interested to learn with our full effort. To become a good player, dancer and singer we need to devote ourselves in those fields.If somebody only believe in inherent talents then we need to look after most popular indian actor Amitabh Bachchan who gave very flopped movies during the beginning of his career. But because of his passionate and endurance he finally achieve positive result and became most demanding indian artists.That's why,believe in yourself and never give up if there is hard situation in our path. Then only we get successful life.

To sum up, both arguments have their merits,on balance I recommended that both inherent talents and many training are the best combination to gain admirable results.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, look, moreover, really, similarly, so, then, therefore, for instance, i think, such as, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 6.8 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 5.60731707317 660% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 33.7804878049 160% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 965.302439024 193% => OK
No of words: 361.0 196.424390244 184% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16343490305 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 3.73543355544 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0303088574 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 106.607317073 192% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567867036011 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 283.868780488 207% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 105.883714266 43.030603864 246% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 143.384615385 112.824112599 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7692307692 22.9334400587 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4615384615 5.23603664747 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 28.0 1.69756097561 1649% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 3.70975609756 350% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149841555247 0.215688989381 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497739047087 0.103423049105 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041031753846 0.0843802449381 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0733255844043 0.15604864568 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467612261681 0.0819641961636 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.2329268293 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 61.2550243902 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 40.7170731707 187% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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