The line below shows the time school children spend on different home activities

Essay topics:

The line below shows the time school children spend on different home activities.

The line chart gives information about how long that 10- to 11-year-olds spent per week on two home entertainment from 2000 to at present.

Overall, two different patterns can be noticed in the time consumed by watching TV and playing computer. School children tend to use more time on the computer and less time on TV.

As can be seen in the chart, watching TV was more popular in the past, with a plateau around taking 21 hours every week between 2000 to 2003. Since then, the hours were used on TV fell by 8 hours to 15 hours per week. After 2004, the time school children spent watching TV showed some fluctuation, varied between 14 to 16 hours per week.

In 2000, it approximately took 3.5 hours weekly for school children to play computer. However, the time spent on playing computer witnessed a significant rise and took over in 2004 as 15 hours. The figures for computers continued demonstrating an increasing pattern and reaches its peak at present, with more than 21.5 hours spending on it.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 342, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...th more than 21.5 hours spending on it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 835.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 177.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71751412429 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.582928261 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610169491525 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 224.1 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.4845634052 43.030603864 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7777777778 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.23603664747 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18877875624 0.215688989381 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862476541755 0.103423049105 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074074206913 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116076944993 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573284543541 0.0819641961636 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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