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Essay topics:

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The line graph illustrates the information about the percentage of citizen’s whose aged more than 65 in 1942 to 2020 and also prediction for 2040 in three different countries namely Japan, Sweden and USA.
Firstly, in 1940 Japan had only 5% of people whose age was 65 and more but after 20 years the proportion was decreased to nearly 3% and stayed steady in 1980. Additionally, the gradual increment can be seen till 2020 while the population of aged people will decline suddenly with some fluctuation till 2040 and it will reach to more than 25%.
Secondly, the percentage for older people was approximately same for Sweden and USA and the fluctuation was also same until 1980. Furthermore, the ratio was nearly 7% for Sweden and approximately 10% for USA while, the proportion for both country had been reached to approximately 15% in 1980. In contrast, the proportion was risen for Sweden and decline for us in 2020. Moreover, it is predicted that the population will nearly same which is approximately 25% in 2040.
Overall, the lifespan of people in Japan was very less but in future it will increase. However, the contrast situation can be seen for Sweden and USA in past while, it will predicted that the ratio will decrease in 2040 compared to Japan.

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Average: 1.1 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 173, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'predict'
Suggestion: predict
...r Sweden and USA in past while, it will predicted that the ratio will decrease in 2040 co...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.97073170732 277% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1048.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 217.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82949308756 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72425465448 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497695852535 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 312.3 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.249114243 43.030603864 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.444444444 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1111111111 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4444444444 5.23603664747 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0462656455356 0.215688989381 21% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0228157022294 0.103423049105 22% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645325510557 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0513353300161 0.15604864568 33% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0889153998112 0.0819641961636 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 173, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'predict'
Suggestion: predict
...r Sweden and USA in past while, it will predicted that the ratio will decrease in 2040 co...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.97073170732 277% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1048.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 217.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82949308756 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72425465448 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497695852535 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 312.3 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.249114243 43.030603864 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.444444444 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1111111111 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4444444444 5.23603664747 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0462656455356 0.215688989381 21% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0228157022294 0.103423049105 22% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645325510557 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0513353300161 0.15604864568 33% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0889153998112 0.0819641961636 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.