In many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people. What do you think maybe the reasons for this? What problems might this cause in society?
The respect to the aging population has changed as they become dependent on others for their physical and financial survival, and their mind is no longer suitable for today’s problems. However, this act might create inharmonic community
Admittedly, the fragile conditions of elder people might push them aside in modern life, and their old-fashioned thinking prevents them to make a contribution. This is because many people consider that taking care for their illnesses and necessity are not something younger people wanting to deal with, and they would rather allocate most time to show their superiority which is more rewarded. Furthermore, the development of technology and culture create difficulties for the elderly to be well-adapted meaning that they do not occupy positions of power as senior citizens that cause less appreciation they get. For example, a senior teacher aged over 50 attains less honor with headmaster as he tends to be slow respond and cannot run the computer to meet the curriculum need. In a similar way, the increasing of nursing home residents in western countries saw a common trend over a decade as their children have a good career so saving their parents might inhibit them in working activities. Therefore, this treatment will improve the risk of dementia and other chronic diseases, and starting from family groups, they should increase awareness to make sure elderly well-being.
What will happen for such behavior? The social life will experience unbalance conditions and it makes old ages as a disastrous period. When younger people do not show politeness while speaking to the age, it causes significant changes in tradition structure to other ways of life which consider dehumanizing. Also, it is likely that the rejection towards this age causes violence and offense in society. For example, the children who accustom yelling out to the grandparents are likely to be cruel and irritable which trigger conflict in society. As a result, not only does it emerges unsafely conditions but a social value which is invaluable from elder people be given to younger people. Therefore, if people want to create prosperity in their life, they should be tolerant of the limitations of elderly people may have.
In conclusion, with no criticism towards elderly conditions, younger people will be respectful and it will guarantee human civilization still having a sense of humanism lasting for centuries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 242, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is act might create inharmonic community Admittedly, the fragile conditions of el...
^^^
Line 2, column 780, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "In a similar way" with adverb for "similar"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...e computer to meet the curriculum need. In a similar way, the increasing of nursing home residen...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 577, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'emerge'?
Suggestion: emerge
... society. As a result, not only does it emerges unsafely conditions but a social value ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 577, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'emerge'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: emerge
... society. As a result, not only does it emerges unsafely conditions but a social value ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 1.00243902439 1397% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 6.8 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 5.60731707317 553% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.97073170732 277% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 965.302439024 213% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 389.0 196.424390244 198% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2853470437 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 3.73543355544 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80915117975 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 106.607317073 213% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583547557841 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 283.868780488 226% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.114718613 43.030603864 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.066666667 112.824112599 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9333333333 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 5.23603664747 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.13902439024 527% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154223867235 0.215688989381 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538010124705 0.103423049105 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390182766151 0.0843802449381 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0954116569485 0.15604864568 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362262044673 0.0819641961636 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.2329268293 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 61.2550243902 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 11.4140731707 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.06136585366 119% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 40.7170731707 287% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.4329268293 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.0658536585 181% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.