International sporting events such as the Olympic Games and the Football World Cup provide an outlet for patriotic feelings and help reduce international tensions.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Essay topics:

International sporting events such as the Olympic Games and the Football World Cup provide an outlet for patriotic feelings and help reduce international tensions.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Through international games, the supporters of the competition wear dress code and make yell, yell for encouraging the athletes to be a winner which is one form of nationalism. This event is also promoted peace and unity among the participants, and it is likely to mitigate the conflict happened at that time.

The use of national symbols during watching International sports games indirectly increases patriotism among its nation. When thousands of watchers gather to the stadium, they will come with the similar outfit and other attributes such as special song and instrument music that they use for raising the spirit of athletes as the win of them means the victory of their country and themselves. For Example, When Football World Cup took place in Russia last year, French Football team supporters wore red and blue cloth as unity attire, and even over 1,000 of them stayed for 2 months to give continuous support until then France is awarded as a winner in 2018. Therefore, by having a sense of ownership in a certain activity, the citizens will be hand in hand to meet challenging achievements.

With the different condition during the sports game, the participated countries reduce the tension for those that are being in war. This is because the frequency of communication for participants is higher than before which will release the hostility and create further mutual forgiveness after the champion. For example, the end of the cold war between North and South Korea which has lasted for a long time occurs after the regional selection in East Asia finish, this is shown by the presidential visit to organize trade cooperation one year later. Therefore such even can cope with many problems effectively as long as it runs in the proper way.

In conclusion, Not only do the sports events bring benefit in its countries, but the overseas association also will improve after taking part and compete with one another in games. Moreover, in the future, the countries in conflict will be no longer exist in the word due to the regular International sports match.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01445086705 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72685525536 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609826589595 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.3916734397 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.583333333 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8333333333 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20558070995 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691471521958 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365925391528 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113431702615 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197782360615 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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