Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar Do you agree or disagree
Increasing sugar levels among people is a global issue nowadays and in order to make people eat less sugar, cost of foods and drinks that includes sugar should be increased. However, I disagree with this opinion as there are other better ways to deal with this problem.
It is true that certain chemicals used in manufacturing edible products contain very high levels of glucose. It can lead to serious health problems like obesity, diabetes, breathing problems like asthma and so on. But making them expensive is not going to help the situation. This has been proven by a study conducted in the US, where the prices of famous cold drinks, with high sugar levels, increased significantly on purpose to check the influence on its sales. The results suggested that the sales did not have any noticeable effect. This leads to the assertion that increasing the costs is not a solution.
But there are other more effective ways to deal with this issue. First of them is to test the products and analyse the amount of sugar present in them. Then, one can find other alternative ways to replace the health- depleting sugar with a harmless one. For instance, there are products launched for this purpose, which claims that they includes sugarless sugar, in other words, the type of sugar which tastes the same as usual but with less harmful effects.
Also, media and influencers can help to make people aware of the consequences of eating and drinking certain products with high sugar level rating. This was done in China in 2017, when a news channel displayed the effects of sugar on body organs in 3d animation. The majority of the people were disgusted and they immediately made a decision not to consume such products or to consume in less quantities.
To conclude, making the products with high sugar levels expensive will not be helpful in dealing with this health issue, other ways which are discussed in the essay can be much more influential.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'include'
Suggestion: include
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Line 7, column 389, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun quantities is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... consume such products or to consume in less quantities. To conclude, making the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, for instance, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 23.0 5.60731707317 410% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 33.7804878049 151% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 965.302439024 168% => OK
No of words: 333.0 196.424390244 170% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87387387387 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 3.73543355544 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45677215531 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 106.607317073 170% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543543543544 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 283.868780488 174% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7286047299 43.030603864 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.4375 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8125 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 5.23603664747 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.13902439024 439% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33740848113 0.215688989381 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104909782675 0.103423049105 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840439124339 0.0843802449381 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208223298833 0.15604864568 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412415091293 0.0819641961636 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 40.7170731707 201% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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