The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Essay topics:

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The picture illustrates two different positions where is expected to build a new supermarket in a town called Garlsdon, which has 65,000 people live there.

Overall, one location, which is predicted to construct a supermarket, is in the center of the town, and another site is a suburb.

On the one hand, if the supermarket is built in the middle of the town, it can attract more consumers who live in the houses and industrial zone nearby. Besides, people live in Bransdon and Cransdon, where they have the population 15,000, 29,000 and are 16 km, 25 km far away from the center respectively, could go there by the main road.

On the other hand, if the supermarket is constructed in the site S1, which is located in the northwest countryside, consumers from Hindon, which has population 10,000 and is 12 km far from the center, can easily go there by another the main road. Both sites are close to the railway, which goes through Grarlson from Hindon to Cransdon.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...n, which has 65,000 people live there. Overall, one location, which is predicte...
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...he town, and another site is a suburb. On the one hand, if the supermarket is b...
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...vely, could go there by the main road. On the other hand, if the supermarket is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, so, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 805.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76331360947 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7065557055 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562130177515 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 234.0 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.4928402504 43.030603864 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.166666667 112.824112599 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1666666667 22.9334400587 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164444833587 0.215688989381 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977418919287 0.103423049105 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739942634144 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126228504227 0.15604864568 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638314240985 0.0819641961636 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.2329268293 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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