More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged.
To what extent do you agree?
More individuals are suffering from health problems which cannot be cured by modern medicines due to a modern lifestyle. Therefore, some people believe that traditional medicine should be returned in use. I disagree with this opinion and this essay will explain in details.
Traditional medicine is made out of natural resources such as trees or flowers, but in today’s time, these ingredients cannot be prevented from contamination due to the increasing problems related to the climate and the water source. Thus, this will affect the overall effectiveness of tradtional medicine, making it ineffective in curing diseases. This is because of the changes in the effectiveness of the medicine which was caused by the factors resulted from current problems related to nature including polluted water or contaminated soil for plants. Mint, for example, is a tree famous for curing fever if planted in polluted soil, its nutritions could literally change from being beneficial to wrecking havoc on people’s health.
The increase in people suffering from uncurable health problems is not the result of modern medicine ineffectiveness, but is due to the current unhealthy lifestyle. Therefore, there is no need to encourage to use traditional medicine. If people want to prevent themselves from uncurable chronic diseases, they need to change their lifestyles first. If they do not attempt to do so, traditional or modern medicine could not save them lives from these diseases. Living healthier can improve people’s mentality and health significantly without too much reliance on natural or artficial medicines. For instance, people who smoke a lot will have less possibility of survival as they face a high risk of lung cancer.
In conclusion, I believe that the encouragement to return to traditional medicine is unnecessary since its cleanness cannot be preserved due to the increasing pollution in the nature nowadays. Furthermore, traditional or modern medicine will render useless in curing untreatable chronic diseases if people have no intention of changing to a better lifestyle.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'using'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: using
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 1.00243902439 1297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 5.60731707317 339% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 33.7804878049 139% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 965.302439024 183% => OK
No of words: 324.0 196.424390244 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46296296296 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 3.73543355544 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04075477559 2.65546596893 115% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 106.607317073 166% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546296296296 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 283.868780488 199% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7790483256 43.030603864 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.23603664747 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 1.13902439024 878% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.428434805637 0.215688989381 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148218504139 0.103423049105 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119755391367 0.0843802449381 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291655930836 0.15604864568 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121925602777 0.0819641961636 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.2329268293 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 61.2550243902 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.3012195122 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 11.4140731707 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 40.7170731707 219% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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