Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening.
Tracking is possibly one of the oldest methods of surveillance. During the rule of kings and lords, spies were appointed secretly, who kept watch and furnished the king with the necessary evidence to act against anyone. They were instrumental in the smoothly running a kingdom. In today's era, these gestapos are replaced with technology. With the advent of Artificial intelligence and supercomputers, many companies have designed stealth software programs that can quietly infiltrate into a person's life, gather necessary information without the individual's knowledge. This tremendous progress has severe ramifications, which can be both progressive and regressive. I sincerely believe that the advantages of such systems cannot overcome its disadvantages.
In today's world, mobile phones are an indispensable part of our lives. We use mobiles for every small reason, be it calling a servant to calling our loved ones. So, anyone tracking us by infiltrating our security camera essentially violates our fundamental right to privacy. This statement makes the first argument. Tracking most importantly violates our basic human rights. For example, if a person tracking a woman using the phone camera witnesses her bathing or changing clothes, such an act tantamount to sexual violence and molestation, with the accused facing serious charges under law. Secondly, to track a person by the cellphone GPS is also a violation of freedom of movement, something which is bestowed on the citizens by the constitution. This is a serious breach of the constitutional rights. Thirdly, tracking software programs are often misused by political parties to gain an upper hand over their rivals during an election. For example, during the polls for the State Legislative Assembly, a party member forced his opponents to step down by leaking their private video.
Every piece of technology always comes with a yin and a yang. In the hands of the good, the yin shines brighter while the yang darkens if the technology is falls in the wrong hands. It is up to the user who can either use monitoring to reduce crime or fulfill his vested interest.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 5.60731707317 392% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 33.7804878049 166% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 3.97073170732 353% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2131.0 965.302439024 221% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 408.0 196.424390244 208% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22303921569 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 3.73543355544 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87062335073 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 106.607317073 234% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610294117647 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 283.868780488 238% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 1.53170731707 522% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 8.94146341463 257% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.8539552415 43.030603864 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.652173913 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7391304348 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47826086957 5.23603664747 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 1.69756097561 530% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 1.13902439024 702% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160812793169 0.215688989381 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0387073911859 0.103423049105 37% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0300100613031 0.0843802449381 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0821679119961 0.15604864568 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347605719745 0.0819641961636 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 61.2550243902 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.06136585366 119% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 40.7170731707 324% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.