Nowadays, young people spend more time in shopping malls. Some people fear that it can cause a negative impact on young people and the society they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, young people spend more time in shopping malls. Some people fear that it can cause a negative impact on young people and the society they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent times, the trend of spending leisure time in shopping malls has increased significantly. It is argued by some, that this will be detrimental for youngsters as well as the community they belong to. In my opinion, I partially agree with this argument.

To begin with, it is essential for us to rejuvenate ourselves, whenever we have free time. There are many ways to do so. For example going to cinema, visiting a resturant, shopping, and attending a social event. However, in order to do so in the past, one had to travel from place to place in a busy city traffic as these activities were seldom present under one roof. With introduction of shopping malls, nowadays it is possible to find almost all of these leisure activities within a single campus. It saves a lot of time and money.

Furthermore, due to avilability of multiple shopping options under one roof, there is a cut-throat competition between commercial brands. This is very beneficial for consumers, as these companies are providing attractive discounts and offers every now and then, in hope of boosting sales at their stores. However, there are some drawbacks of this mall culture too. For instance, it is giving rise to binge shopping habbits in some individuals. Also, instead of engaging into sports or creative activities, youngsters are preferring to stroll in an air conditioned shopping complex to spend their free time.

To conclude, although the shopping malls provide a convenient option to spend free time, it is making youth lazy and less creative. I believe that, there is a need of establishing an equillibrium between various options for young people to utilize their free time.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, then, well, for example, for instance, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 5.60731707317 446% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 33.7804878049 139% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 965.302439024 145% => OK
No of words: 279.0 196.424390244 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01792114695 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83401280452 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 106.607317073 163% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623655913978 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 283.868780488 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 1.53170731707 588% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.113540144 43.030603864 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4375 22.9334400587 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 5.23603664747 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156018755006 0.215688989381 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473020653103 0.103423049105 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356290956644 0.0843802449381 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0953398220436 0.15604864568 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360218062204 0.0819641961636 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 40.7170731707 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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