The percentage of attending arts events in some reasons
The table compares the percentage of adults who attend arts events in some reasons starting from 20 years ago until today. It can be clearly seen that during the years given the reason for seeing specific artist is the highest percentage among others where in 20 years ago it peaked by 58%, and comparatively today percentage goes down slightly about 56%.
Accompanying children increased dramatically over the years, when in 20 years ago it was just 9% and reaches at 24% today. Similarly, the reason for business showed an uptrend from 6 to 10 percent in 20 and 10 years ago respectively. Currently, this reason apparently rises to 10%.
Special occasion, however, went down dramatically from 27% to 20% in 20 and 10 years ago, then it continuously drops 9% by today.
To sum up, there are 2 reasons climbed up over the years, accompanying the children and for business. To see an artist, meanwhile, waved while celebrating special occasion fell significantly.
the reason for seeing specific artist is the highest percentage
the reason for seeing specific artist has the highest percentage
the reason for seeing specific artist is in the highest percentage
and comparatively today percentage goes down slightly about 56%.
and comparatively today the percentage goes down slightly to 56%.
the reason for business showed an uptrend from 6 to 10 percent in 20 and 10 years ago respectively.
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went down dramatically from 27% to 20% in 20 and 10 years ago, then it continuously drops 9% by today.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 162 200
No. of Characters: 771 1000
No. of Different Words: 100 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.568 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.759 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.828 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 51 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 38 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.997 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.473 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.728 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.141 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4