The pie charts below show the average household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia Summarise the information below

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The pie charts below show the average household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia.
Summarise the information below

This pie charts compares the average amount spent on household items in Japan and Malaysia in 2010

Overall, the highest expenses made was on housing in Malaysia, however, this proportion was slightly lower in Japan. Food and other goods and services followed almost a similar trend, although, the amount spent on these items varied slightly in both regions.

To begin, as shown in the graph, the highest expenses made in Malaysia in 2010 was on housing which constituted about 34% and remained the highest amount used in purchasing household items for that year, however, in Japan, the amount was slightly lower. Following this, each family spents more than a fifth (29% and 26%) of their income on other goods and services in both regions respectively.

Next, the expenditure on food in Malaysia was 27% while that of Japan was 24% .finally, money used for transportation was a fifth in Japan and one in Ten in Malaysia. The least amongst all was healthcare, only a negligible amount was used for this purpose in both countries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 874.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96590909091 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54920583971 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539772727273 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.9965053678 43.030603864 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.666666667 112.824112599 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 22.9334400587 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.23603664747 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141367720881 0.215688989381 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632904729914 0.103423049105 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842280660763 0.0843802449381 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100951336239 0.15604864568 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105851501136 0.0819641961636 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.2329268293 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.4329268293 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.0658536585 154% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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