The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
The given pie graphs compare four different factors in terms of the online shopping sales in the years 2003 and 2013 respectively.
As can be seen from the graph, the online sales for books and film or music experienced an upward trend, while the opposite was true for that of travelling and clothes. It is also noticeable that travelling accounted for the most percentage at the beginning of the period, that of in the year 2013 was film and music.
Standing at 36% in 2003, the proportion of online shopping for travelling decreased by 7% in 2013. Similarly, the percentage of clothes sold online dropped from 24% to 16% after ten years. By contrast, that of film or music witnessed a significant growth from over a fifth to approximately a third during the period shown.
Looking at the remain sector, there was a marginal rise in the percentage of books sold on the Internet, from 19% to 22% at the end of the period.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 12, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...rd during the period shown. Looking at the remain sector, there was a marginal rise in th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, similarly, so, third, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 763.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 164.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65243902439 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64717728736 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579268292683 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 221.4 283.868780488 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.014909383 43.030603864 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.23603664747 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177647242972 0.215688989381 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918525682887 0.103423049105 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691892996203 0.0843802449381 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115012093492 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364586109084 0.0819641961636 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.2329268293 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 12, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...rd during the period shown. Looking at the remain sector, there was a marginal rise in th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, similarly, so, third, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 763.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 164.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65243902439 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64717728736 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579268292683 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 221.4 283.868780488 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.014909383 43.030603864 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.23603664747 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177647242972 0.215688989381 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918525682887 0.103423049105 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691892996203 0.0843802449381 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115012093492 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364586109084 0.0819641961636 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.2329268293 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.