The pie charts below show online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts below show online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts illustrate the information about Internet buying sales for retail parts in New Zealand in the year 2003 and 2013.
Overall, at the beginning of the period, the travel sector was the most significant of online shopping, while books were the least portion of internet buying for retail sectors. In comparison, at the end of the time, books and film/music sales were rose, meanwhile, travel and clothes sales dwindled.

Firstly, concerning online clothes sales in New Zealand, in 2003, 24% of online sales for retail sectors, and its slump to 16% in 2013. Similarly, the travel sector was 36% of internet sales for retail sectors in 2003, and in 2013, it sank to 29%.
On the other hand, online sales of film/music were 21% in 2003 in New Zealand, and in 2013, it was a dramatic shift to almost one-third, and this was strikingly for retail sectors. Moreover, 19% part of internet books sales in 2003, and it was enhanced by 3% in 2013.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, similarly, so, third, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 790.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75903614458 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.448185656 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 79.0 106.607317073 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475903614458 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 218.7 283.868780488 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.482926829268 1035% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.5749836395 43.030603864 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.857142857 112.824112599 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7142857143 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8571428571 5.23603664747 207% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345129835424 0.215688989381 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.193028929411 0.103423049105 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0947884669399 0.0843802449381 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252873179028 0.15604864568 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0961760592215 0.0819641961636 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 61.2550243902 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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