The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim.
The issue is whether or not The best approach for a society to prepare its adult folk for leadership in ministry, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of Team-work, not competition. I defy the statement because to praise and leadership in government, company and so on folk should do competition rather than cooperation, and behind this disagreement, my following reasons mentioned below:
Firstly, In this modern epoch, In Country there is uncountable industry, and without competition can't predict result which is summit industry. For instance, In nation there is 20 IT company, and when nation should select top-3 company of IT industry, and without competition country can't choose or say this is best IT company of our nation. Moreover, Folk also should do competition to represent their prowess in front of public.
Secondly, If folk can't do competition then who will lead the government without competition, and People's are argue each other and say I will lead, and you are not capable, So without competition it is stubborn. In Competition nation get consummate leader. Furthermore, In competition folk talent also burgeon whether it win or lose.
On the whole, the original statement is not veracity. The best approach for a society to prepare its adult peeps for leadership in any fields is instilling in them a sense of competition Because Folk can't grow their talent without competition, and also no one can say who is crest. In addition, Nation can't get pinnacle leader.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
The issue is whether or not The best approach for a society to prep...
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...roach for a society to prepare its adult folk for leadership in ministry, industr...
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...irstly, In this modern epoch, In Country there is uncountable industry, and witho...
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
...table industry, and without competition cant predict result which is summit industry...
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Suggestion: companies
... For instance, In nation there is 20 IT company, and when nation should select top-3 co...
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Line 3, column 285, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...dustry, and without competition country cant choose or say this is best IT company o...
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Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
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...ntry cant choose or say this is best IT company of our nation. Moreover, Folk also shou...
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
...n front of public. Secondly, If folk cant do competition then who will lead the g...
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Suggestion: argued
...nt without competition, and Peoples are argue each other and say I will lead, and you...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...hem a sense of competition Because Folk cant grow their talent without competition, ...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...n say who is crest. In addition, Nation cant get pinnacle leader.
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ition, Nation cant get pinnacle leader.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, for instance, in addition, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 58.6224719101 51% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1268.0 2235.4752809 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 248.0 442.535393258 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11290322581 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92459652402 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 215.323595506 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487903225806 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 704.065955056 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 98.4134645259 60.3974514979 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.8 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3 5.21951772744 236% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245821927224 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896858915732 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126282331568 0.0758088955206 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164519731322 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0960694163483 0.0667264976115 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 100.480337079 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.