The pie charts show the electricity generated in germany and france from all souces and renewables in the year 2009.summarise the informantion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts show the electricity generated in germany and france from all souces and renewables in the year 2009.summarise the informantion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The circular charts reveal that information of represention the electricity generatd in germany and france from all sources and renewables in the 2009.

Moving a quick glance on the illustration germany electricity generation all types in 2009.Afterthat, in 2009 all types was uplifted ratio in conventional thermal 59.6 percent.But also, nuclear was little bit reduced 23.0 proprotion. Therefore, renewables was very climbed percent in the chart 17.4. Then,
Biomass and wind was similar ratio in 36.9 to 39.3 proprotion. As far as,gerthermal was plummet proprotion in the chart was 0.0 percent.It was very lowest percent .

Nevertheless, france electricity generation in 2009 was boomed percent nuclear in 76.0. As well as, conventional termal and renewables was equal proprotion in 10.3 to 13.7. As a result ,hydroelectric was upsurge percent in the chart in 80.5. Last ,solar and geothermal was same ratio and very declined proprotion in 0.0.

To sum up, geothermal was equal percent in germany and france in 0.0.Hence, renewables was similar proportion two nations electricity generation in 2009.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, well, as a result, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.97073170732 302% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 942.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57396449704 4.92477711251 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18471696471 2.65546596893 120% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532544378698 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 270.0 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.4926829268 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 136.611273327 43.030603864 317% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 188.4 112.824112599 167% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.8 22.9334400587 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 19.4 5.23603664747 371% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 1.69756097561 884% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17929036503 0.215688989381 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128896349479 0.103423049105 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0941750891638 0.0843802449381 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144581580906 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0902132179183 0.0819641961636 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.7 13.2329268293 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 61.2550243902 62% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.3012195122 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.62 11.4140731707 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.4329268293 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.9970731707 138% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.0658536585 145% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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