The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Elmi on Mon, 09/03/2018 - 18:06

According to the given maps, it illustrates the layout of the sports centre of a university before reconstruction and how it will look like after it has been renovated partially.

In the first image, is it clear that the university has approximately 25 meter pool, which is surrounded by a Changing Room, Gym, Seating area and a Reception at the entrance of the sports centre. It also has two outdoor courts on both west and east sides of the sports centre.

The future plan is to destroy the outdoor courts and then replace them with more suitable facilities like, Leisure Pool, Changing Room and a Sports shop on the west side, and on the east side, there is going be a Sports Hall, two small Dance Studios, a Changing Room and a Café.

The university sports centre will seem bigger then it is now, even though the Changing Room, Gym, Seating are and Reception that surrounded the mail pool will not be vandalised. The sports centre will have three Changing Rooms instead of one, two dance studios, the Gym will be bigger, there will be a Café, a Sports shop as well as a Sports Hall. In addition to that, there is going to be two swimming pools, that is, the main pool and an even bigger Leisure Pool.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 179, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d the mail pool will not be vandalised. The sports centre will have three Changing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, look, so, then, well, in addition, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 997.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 219.0 196.424390244 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55251141553 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40124478606 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493150684932 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 290.7 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.0295491231 43.030603864 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.428571429 112.824112599 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2857142857 22.9334400587 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 5.23603664747 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180564532638 0.215688989381 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0984564488032 0.103423049105 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746756242634 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124834206466 0.15604864568 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0782591987836 0.0819641961636 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.2329268293 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.39 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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