The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.Summarise the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whee relevant.

Essay topics:

The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarise the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whee relevant.

The maps presented below compare the layout of university sports centre with regarding to a present situation and future plans of this.

Overall , it can be clearly seen that sports centre will be increased in future by adding to the each side of this additional modifications. These will involve appearing a leisure pool in the west , and the path to the entrance will be divided into 2 ways , which are sports shop and cafe respectively , with a changing rooms on the south-west and east-west of those.

Turning to the details , by considering the present layout the outdoor courts which are located at the front of mid of the centre on their positions will be built leisure pool and sports hall. The main concept of the centre will not change according to the future forecast , with the except of gym , which will be extended.

On the other hand , the entrance will be divided into 2 paths. The first way locating in the east-south part of the plan will lead to gym and sports hall , while the path locating in south-west will respectively lead to leisure pool as well as to main pool.

Also changing rooms will be available.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...sure pool as well as to main pool. Also changing rooms will be available.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, regarding, so, well, while, as to, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 1.00243902439 1097% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 934.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74111675127 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54778537031 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507614213198 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 271.8 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8562599492 43.030603864 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.75 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.625 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.125 5.23603664747 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 1.69756097561 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169465442164 0.215688989381 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0872104891306 0.103423049105 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422025824207 0.0843802449381 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108619772652 0.15604864568 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450356850105 0.0819641961636 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.2329268293 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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