The birth rate in most developed countries is predicted to begin to fall over the next 50 years. By
2030 it is estimated that over one third of the population in most developed countries will be aged
65 and over.
What effects will these predictions have on developed countries if they prove true? What
can be done now to deal with this situation?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.
A number of people have the opinion that learning about their own countries' history is more vital than learning about world history for children. While I agree that local history is necessary for pupils, I believe that world history should be equally important.
There are some reasons why learning local history is of importance for schoolchildren. first, it is an important means of educating children about their own countries' culture, which may instil in them a sense of patriotism. pupils in Vietnam, for example, often feel a sense of pride when learning about several victories of Vietnamese ancients against outside intruders in a number of long-lasting wars. Second, learning about local legends in history helps children be more motivated to study hard and pursue their dream. Indeed, when learning about legendary writers in a local region and reading and reading their works of literature, children will be inspired by them and have more motivations to study writing in their mother language.
However, there also good reasons why learning world history is beneficial for children. The first reason is that this is a way to broaden children's knowledge of other cultures, which is essential in today's context of globalisation. If children enjoy learning about english history, they will have a good chance to improve their english reading skill, which certainly has positive impacts when they work for a foreign company in the future. Furthermore, learning about other countries' history also stimulate children's curiosity about other countries. As a result, they know more about foreigners and easily make friends worldwide.
In conclusion, I believe that learning world history is as important as learning local history for children because both two branches of history have their own unique benefits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: First
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Suggestion: Pupils
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...ture. Furthermore, learning about other countries history also stimulate childrens curios...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3951048951 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68083332725 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51048951049 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7147829518 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.692307692 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0460737287043 0.244688304435 19% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0206190243145 0.084324248473 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0197037581209 0.0667982634062 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0330999719507 0.151304729494 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0117835195691 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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