Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The question of whether to allow or to forbid mobile phones among students within the campus has been controversial. In this essay, I will explain both sides of this heated argument, and state personal point of view about the phenomenon.
On the one hand, a cell phone would be a promising supporting device, as users are able to search for information via the internet. Encountering obstacles, children can quickly research viable solutions, which are sometimes better than ones in the standard syllabus. Additionally, if each student has a personal phone, they may ask for rescue in case of emergency situations. For example, a timely accurate 911 call would help a student overcome the sudden accident.
On the other hand, however, due to rapid, easy availability to enormous database, phones would be employed as a tool for academic dishonesty. For instance, in order to achieve top-tier result, students would save the lessons on devices then use them in formal examinations. Apparently, quick-finding feature actually does more harm than good, at least to the student's personality.
Moreover, juvenile learners may get distracted by mobile application. Without being overseen, adolescents would spend hours using social media, namely the Facebook. This will hinder the learning progression because essential knowledge is now less concentrated. Besides, enjoying video games can lead to serious adiction, which has not yet had an effective remedy.
In conclusion, it is obvious that mobile phone is a positive invention. However, it is distractive and can be used to cheat by the children, therefore should receive a sure prohibition, in my opinion. Allowing children to possess phones, parents should ensure they use correctly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
The question of whether to allow or to forbid mobile phones amo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...es more harm than good, at least to the students personality. Moreover, juvenile lea...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, apparently, besides, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 1.00243902439 1397% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1477.0 965.302439024 153% => OK
No of words: 271.0 196.424390244 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45018450185 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9660368783 2.65546596893 112% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 106.607317073 178% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.70110701107 0.547539520022 128% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 283.868780488 162% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.2735128572 43.030603864 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.3125 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9375 22.9334400587 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 5.23603664747 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.13902439024 527% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208408559833 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619978555075 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583355540787 0.0843802449381 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112628916517 0.15604864568 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758573776247 0.0819641961636 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 61.2550243902 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 11.4140731707 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.31 8.06136585366 128% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 40.7170731707 248% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.