Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.Discuss both these views and give yo

Essay topics:

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Build a healthy society is one of the most controversial subjects in modern world. Although, some people think that rising the number of sports equipments could be beneficial for such issue, the other believe that there should be more practical suggestions. In my opinion, governments should be more realistic about it and come up with more workable alternatives.

Most of the people do not have any vigorous activities which is because of their sedentary lifestyle. So, they just walk couple of minutes during the day. Obviously, if the sports facilities are installed at their workplace, as a result, they will be more active and energetic which lead to the healthier physiology.

People's diet has been changed a lot in recent years. To be precise, due to their hectic lifestyle, they would prefer to have a prepared meal in mid-day ,contains junk food and unhealthy nutrition, which may be cause of serious diseases such as heart attack and obesity. To tackle this problem, media should define a solution to change eating habits to not only the healthier one, but also the one which leads to longevity.

In conclusion, there is two different belief about public health solutions. The former one is based on increasing the number of sports equipments and the later one is based on more foundation resolution. In my point of view, due to the changing in eating habits, installing more facilities is not the best option and there should be more efficient alters such as changing peoples diet and manufactured more healthier nutrition.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...refer to have a prepared meal in mid-day ,contains junk food and unhealthy nutriti...
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Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: BE_CAUSE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'because'?
Suggestion: because
...food and unhealthy nutrition, which may be cause of serious diseases such as heart attac...
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Line 7, column 403, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
... changing peoples diet and manufactured more healthier nutrition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1289.0 965.302439024 134% => OK
No of words: 255.0 196.424390244 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05490196078 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73681102081 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 106.607317073 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596078431373 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 394.2 283.868780488 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4687720977 43.030603864 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.416666667 112.824112599 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.23603664747 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107138969101 0.215688989381 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0409700679117 0.103423049105 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389503715881 0.0843802449381 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0648149685935 0.15604864568 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321372930019 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.2329268293 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 40.7170731707 172% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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