Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.Choose which position you most agr

Essay topics:

Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.

Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.

Today, major focus of parents and children is on the facilities provided by the school. Public school generally lacks major facilities in comparison to private schools due to unavailability of funds and resources. It is agreed that placing advertisements in public school would help them acquire additional funds and resources. The essay will analyze how additional funds through advertisement would help public school in increasing student intake and shaping children future.

Firstly, additional funds would help public school increase the student intake. For example, they can have large library with varieties of books, extracurricular facilities like swimming pool, etc. This example makes it obvious that such facilities would attract students and they would prefer public school to private school. In conclusion, advertisements in public school would help them in funding, thus increase in student intake.

Secondly, additional fund would help private school shape student's future. For instance, public school can offer scholarship and reduce fee admission to underprivileged kids. This example exemplifies how it will help student from different class. Thus, it is obvious that advertisement help school in additional funding.

Analyzing the above points makes it obvious that additional funds through advertisement would help school increase student intake and shape underprivileged kids. Thus, advertisements in public school helps gain them funds and eventually help the students. It is recommended that public school should explore advertisements as additional source of income.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 1.00243902439 1297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 5.60731707317 321% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 965.302439024 142% => OK
No of words: 231.0 196.424390244 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93506493506 4.92477711251 121% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9828944566 2.65546596893 112% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463203463203 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 399.6 283.868780488 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.4521370697 43.030603864 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4 22.9334400587 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73333333333 5.23603664747 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 3.70975609756 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235512428493 0.215688989381 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119738510842 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527695408901 0.0843802449381 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183656808931 0.15604864568 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190996555867 0.0819641961636 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 61.2550243902 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.88 11.4140731707 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 40.7170731707 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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