The table below gives information about the employment rates and the average annual salaries of new graduates in an Australian University in 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant

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The table below gives information about the employment rates and the average

annual salaries of new graduates in an Australian University in 2009. Summarise the

information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where

relevant

The rendered tabular chart illustrates the data about employment rate and the average yearly salaries of fresh degree holders of Australian university in the year 2009.

From the overall analysis, it is manifest that law, engineering and I.t, business graduates experienced a highest salary as compared to haealth and science graduates.

At the fleeting glance it is immensely clear that, Very large majority of health graduates were employe and received annual income was $42,000.In contrast, law and engineering fields employment received equal annual salary($59,000).It is interesting that business graduates higher than art and social science graduates, however annual salary was greater in the case of business graduates accounting for 52,000.As regards science graduates were employe and received $39,000 ,which happened to be the least.

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Average: 6.8 (22 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, as regards, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 12.0 33.7804878049 36% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 722.0 965.302439024 75% => OK
No of words: 124.0 196.424390244 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.82258064516 4.92477711251 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.33699396548 3.73543355544 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78920357946 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 84.0 106.607317073 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.677419354839 0.547539520022 124% => OK
syllable_count: 216.0 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 8.94146341463 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 41.0 22.4926829268 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 157.685340684 43.030603864 366% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 240.666666667 112.824112599 213% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 41.3333333333 22.9334400587 180% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.3333333333 5.23603664747 255% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18080782908 0.215688989381 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123250514565 0.103423049105 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634487935686 0.0843802449381 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123250514565 0.15604864568 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634487935686 0.0819641961636 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.6 13.2329268293 201% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 21.4 61.2550243902 35% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.5 10.3012195122 199% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.36 11.4140731707 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.06136585366 127% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.4329268293 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.4 10.9970731707 167% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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