The graph below shows the types of transport used by tourists who visited New Zealand from five countries in 2004 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the types of transport used by tourists who visited New

Zealand from five countries in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and

reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The rendered chart illustrates the percentage of tourists from British,German,japan,korean,Australia, who used different mode of transport when they visited new Zealand in the year 2004.

Overall, it is clear that japan preferred air travel the most, whilst the other given countries used car the most.

At the fleeting glance, it is immensely clear that 60% British and approximately 52%,50%,45% German,korean,Australia tourist used car to visit various places in NewZaeland.The least proportion of japanese tourist about a quarater(25%) used the car to travel around NewZaeland.Tourists from japan were most fond of air travel.Roughly 55% japanese tourist used air transport to travel within NewZaeland.Air transport used by 35% British,30% Korean and 25% German tourists.By contrast merely 11% Australians used air transport.

Probing further, similar percentage of (20%) British and German used the coach, this proportion double in case of Koreans(40%).Almost 52% used by japan tourists.Only 8% tourists used in Australian, which was the least.48% german tourists and 35% british tourist used ferry.The tourists from japan,korea and Australia were less than 15% in each case ,who uses ferry as a mean of transport.

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Average: 7.3 (49 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1048.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 180.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.82222222222 4.92477711251 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.22302623924 2.65546596893 159% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 106.607317073 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605555555556 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 288.0 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 45.0 22.4926829268 200% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 162.075599644 43.030603864 377% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 262.0 112.824112599 232% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.0 22.9334400587 196% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 5.23603664747 10% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 1.69756097561 1119% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20826375744 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144854054048 0.103423049105 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638563006144 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144854054048 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638563006144 0.0819641961636 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.5 13.2329268293 215% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 25.8 61.2550243902 42% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.8 10.3012195122 202% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 17.36 11.4140731707 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.06136585366 127% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.4329268293 171% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.0 10.9970731707 182% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.0658536585 181% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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