The Table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults aged 16 years and over whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months

As businesses become more competitive, almost every manager is now trying to motivate their employees to put more effort into their job performance, and a common way of doing so is basing an employee’s salary on their rate of production one of the most effective methods of encouraging and motivating people to be hardworking, in the workplace, is to give them parsing depend on their productivity, in terms of production and sales. In my opinion, I agree.

On one hand, in competitive statements companies search the ways that can engage employees in positive competition and try to work harder to more profit. One of the main reasons people work in an office is money. We need money to support our family, our personal needs, and to live in this world. Then a large of employees are motivated and enthusiastic to put all their energy and strength when aware they would be paid according to their efforts. Hence, the company s ranking and revenue will improve.

On the other hand, some people have the opinion have to pay staff for raising in sales would not be any negative impact on others. Any form of reward like a plane ticket, certificate, or holiday is quite restricted in terms of utilization however money would give the employee complete freedom on how to spend it. for instance, maybe a staff wants to give his mother the additional wage he might earn. This is a result of the consciousness that their salary is depended on how much they produce or sell. For this reason, they would compete with coworkers to be the best and this will lead to improve sales and produce.
In conclusion, I believe that deciding how much an employee should earn based on sales or production is a good method. Employers when aware about earn more money than try more.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (2 votes)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, may, so, then, thus, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 1.00243902439 998% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 5.60731707317 482% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 33.7804878049 139% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1461.0 965.302439024 151% => OK
No of words: 308.0 196.424390244 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74350649351 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66365781333 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 106.607317073 166% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574675324675 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 283.868780488 163% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 95.888780174 43.030603864 223% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 104.357142857 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 22.9334400587 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.23603664747 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0195321745143 0.215688989381 9% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00819398063079 0.103423049105 8% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0182514470637 0.0843802449381 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0104595770837 0.15604864568 7% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0122651183148 0.0819641961636 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 40.7170731707 172% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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