The table gives information about average hours spent per week in front of computer by people different age group in China

Essay topics:

The table gives information about average hours spent per week in front of computer by people different age group in China.

The provided tubular chart demonstrates the information about the males and females who utilized their average time in front of computer in various age in China.

As observed from the given table chart that in 16to 20 age group, there was maximum 24 hours which spent by males while only 7 hours which was consumed by 51+ age group. To annexation it, there was the difference of just 2 hours between 10to15 and 21 to 25 age group in men. In age 26 to 50,the hours were almost equal which spent by males.

It is interesting to notice that the women who wasted 23 hours in front of computers in 16 to 20 age group whereas 8 hours which was spent by 10 to 15 and 50+ female age group. Moreover in age 21 to 25 and 26 to 50,10 hours and 9 hours were spent in front of computer by females respectively.

Overall, people of 10 to 25 age, males spent more time in front of computers however 26 to 50+ both did almost equal spent time.

Votes
Average: 9.1 (4 votes)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 765.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 178.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.29775280899 4.92477711251 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28590942433 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505617977528 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 222.3 283.868780488 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2613494558 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.285714286 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 22.9334400587 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.23603664747 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.410830932532 0.215688989381 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.205800551374 0.103423049105 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469868107544 0.0843802449381 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24842746638 0.15604864568 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040282464588 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.94 61.2550243902 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.96 11.4140731707 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.06136585366 86% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 40.7170731707 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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