the two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities

Essay topics:

the two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities

The given maps compare the different features of an island before and after building touristic facilities for visitors.
Overall, the first impression from map before is that the vast majority of island area is almost unused. While, new design for map after, contains various facilities which not exist in old map to attract tourists.
Firstly, from map before, it can be seen that some trees planted in the eastern and western sides of the island. Furthermore, in the west of island, it has only a small beach. While the central region of island is merely free.
On the other hand, from map after, it can be observed that a numerous facilities is built later. First of all, reception is constructed in the heart of central region. This reception is connected to restaurant in the northern part and pier on the southern part by car track. Moreover, many accommodation units are built on both sides of the reception with a footpath connecting units each other as well as the reception. It is interesting to mention that the green areas and the beach are unchanged. Nevertheless, the eastern are of island is not properly used as before.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t of island, it has only a small beach. While the central region of island is merely ...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 71, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'facility'?
Suggestion: facility
...ter, it can be observed that a numerous facilities is built later. First of all, reception...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 395, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
... a footpath connecting units each other as well as the reception. It is interesting to men...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, well, while, as well as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 946.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 195.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85128205128 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63504924995 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584615384615 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 288.9 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.3168461045 43.030603864 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.8333333333 112.824112599 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 22.9334400587 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 5.23603664747 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315220602962 0.215688989381 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100870283472 0.103423049105 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999355380721 0.0843802449381 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211089872876 0.15604864568 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103753382913 0.0819641961636 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.2329268293 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 61.2550243902 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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