The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

Essay topics:

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps represent the same island. Whilst first one is the before and second one is after the construction of tourist facilities.

Overall, before the construction of tourist facilities, we can see a huge island with a beach in the west and some trees on island. Moving to second map there have been built many buildings. Between two areas of accommodation there is a restaurant with reception block surrounded by vehicle track which connected to Pier where people can go for sailing in the south sea of island. In the west there has been built a swimming facility which is next to the beach for these places people can go through footpath. The islands length is approximately 250 metres.

It is clear that, the first map has no facility except trees and a beach in the west connected with island.

In latter map, lots of facilities have been developed. There are two places of accommodation. Moreover, tourist people can stay at accommodation. For having food there has been built a restaurant with a reception in center of accommodation. There is a vehicle track connects to restaurant and Pier. This track linked with footpath which goes from accommodation to beach. It is noticeable that beach and the trees are in the same place that can be seen in first map also. Compared to previous map of island, second map is become very attractive tourist place.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 237, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en two areas of accommodation there is a restaurant with reception block surroun...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ccommodation there is a restaurant with reception block surrounded by vehicle tr...
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Line 3, column 517, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'islands'' or 'island's'?
Suggestion: islands'; island's
...ces people can go through footpath. The islands length is approximately 250 metres. ...
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Line 7, column 466, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ame place that can be seen in first map also. Compared to previous map of island, s...
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Line 7, column 499, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...st map also. Compared to previous map of island, second map is become very attrac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, moreover, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1137.0 965.302439024 118% => OK
No of words: 235.0 196.424390244 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83829787234 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76710287249 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485106382979 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 341.1 283.868780488 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0284566746 43.030603864 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.0625 112.824112599 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6875 22.9334400587 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0625 5.23603664747 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.09268292683 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272420480523 0.215688989381 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979756883111 0.103423049105 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0994798576767 0.0843802449381 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20490556283 0.15604864568 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117352094805 0.0819641961636 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.2329268293 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.2 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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