The two pie chart below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Essay topics:

The two pie chart below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

The given pie charts illustrates the online sales record for retail sectors in Canada in two different years, 2005 and 2010. The retail sector for online shopping is categorized into four categories including electronics and appliance, food and beverages, home furnishing and video games.

Overall, the greatest proportion of online retail sales was recorded for electronics and appliance in 2005 while the consumers demand for online food and beverage made to top in 2010. Food and beverage followed by video games, 18 percent, were among the sectors with positive impact on online retail reservations.

The electronics and appliances was the lead e-shopping marketing sector with 35 percent share in total online marketing followed by home furnishing (25%), food and beverage (22%) and video games (18%).

Contrastly, in 2010, the buyers preference to online booking shifted to food and beverages with a total share of 32% with a largest turnover of 10 percent since 2005. Similarly, the share of video games increased by 5 percent in the given five years period.The major downfall was experienced with home furnishing with a net shrink of 10 percent.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, similarly, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 973.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 184.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28804347826 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71855953149 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538043478261 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.0908553144 43.030603864 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 139.0 112.824112599 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2857142857 22.9334400587 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331617270412 0.215688989381 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191498506269 0.103423049105 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.179169069329 0.0843802449381 212% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231364937107 0.15604864568 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.18468151728 0.0819641961636 225% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.2329268293 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 61.2550243902 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 11.4140731707 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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