The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Essay topics:

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

The given pie chart describes the online sales of retail sectors in Canada by the year 2005 and 2010. It also shows the percentage of sales with respect to the departments in those years.

In 2005 sales of video games is at bottom when compared to all other. however, electronics & appliances remains at the top.
when it comes to 2010 those peak and low places were replaced by the good & beverages and home furnishings.

when we compare the department wise video games sales hiked from 18 % to 23%, food & beverages upsurge by 10 % in 2010 when compared to 2005. However electronics & appliances, home furnishings sales have a down fall of 5 and 10 %.

In conclusion, retails sales of food & beverages, video games raised over the years. when it comes to home furnishings and electronics & appliances we see the shrink.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, so, in conclusion, with respect to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 684.0 965.302439024 71% => OK
No of words: 139.0 196.424390244 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92086330935 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.43363162301 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72239447949 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589928057554 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 199.8 283.868780488 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.4920527671 43.030603864 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.0 112.824112599 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4444444444 22.9334400587 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.23603664747 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248352242203 0.215688989381 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110711983719 0.103423049105 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154984463849 0.0843802449381 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144820430216 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.15580412688 0.0819641961636 190% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.2329268293 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 61.2550243902 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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