writing task 1

Essay topics:

writing task 1

The pie charts illustrate the average proportions of three different substances (sodium, saturated fats and add sugar) in various meals (breakfast, dinner, lunch, snacks) consumed by people living in the America.
Overall, It is clear that sodium and saturated fat made up the highest proportion in dinner. While, the proportion of added sugar in snacks was the highest. It is also noticeable that the figures for sodium, saturated fat and sugar took up the lowest rate in breakfast.
In terms of dinner, the amount of sugar added accounted for 23%. Whereas, the figures for sodium and fat were considerably higher than that of sugar, with 43% and 37% respectively. However, citizens living in the USA consumed less sodium, sugar and fat when they had breakfast, with only 14%,16% and 14% respectively and these figures were significantly lower than that of dinner.
Regarding to snacks, sugar made up the highest ratio, with over a half, twice as much as the rate of saturated fat and considerably higher than that of sodium, by 28%. Last but not least, for lunch, the amounts of sodium and fat consumed accounted for a third and 26% respectively. While the figure for added sugar is slightly lower, with 19%.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'substances'' or 'substance's'?
Suggestion: substances'; substance's
... average proportions of three different substances sodium, saturated fats and add sugar in...
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Line 2, column 93, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...de up the highest proportion in dinner. While, the proportion of added sugar in snack...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 59, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s, sugar made up the highest ratio, with over a half, twice as much as the rate o...
^^
Line 4, column 199, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., by 28%. Last but not least, for lunch, the amounts of sodium and fat consumed a...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, regarding, so, third, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1009.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 203.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97044334975 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63084627674 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507389162562 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 301.5 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0215340028 43.030603864 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.9 112.824112599 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.23603664747 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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